For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Should Retirement Age Be Raised? You should write at l

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问题 For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Should Retirement Age Be Raised? You should write at least 150 words according to the outline given below.
1.有人赞成提高退休年龄
2.有人则反对
3.你的看法
                    Should Retirement Age Be Raised?

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答案 Should Retirement Age Be Raised? (1)Whether to raise the retirement age has became a hot topic nowadays.(2)Many people see increasing the retirement age as a way to help address the financial challenges in the social security fund(2)And, they say, there are(3)compelling demographic reasons for such a change — increased life spans, increased working capabilities, and a structural demand for experienced labor. (4)However, many more were against raising the retirement age.(5)They argue that the pension fund has a surplus now.(5)Besides, a prolonged life span doesn’t necessarily mean that people are able to work longer.(5)More importantly, raising the retirement age would(3)put more strain on the already grave employment situation. Adding working years for those now employed would mean fewer openings for the new job seekers who are younger and healthier. (6)Personally, I think the government should raise the retirement age only when there is a severe labor shortage, relatively high pension payments or the government is in a fiscal crisis.(7)However, it’s apparent that our country now has none of these three scenarios.(7)Therefore, I don’t think it necessary to raise the official retirement age at present.

解析 (1)开篇点题
(2)给出支持者的两个理由,分析全面
(3)亮点表达:“非常有说服力的”:“给…施加更多压力”
(4)转折,过渡到讲述反对者的观点
(5)三个原因有主有次,且与上文形成对照
(6)引出自己观点的常用表达
(7)两个连词的使用使句子逻辑更清晰
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