For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay related to the short passage given below. In your essay, you are to

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问题     For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay related to the short passage given below. In your essay, you are to comment on the phenomenon described in the passage and suggest measures to address the issue. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

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答案 There is much knowledge in raising children. Parents must not only protect their children, but also learn to let go of them at the right time. However, some parents are overprotective of their children, depriving them of the opportunity to explore the world on their own. On the one hand, if parents overprotect their children and do not let them endure hardship at all, their children will not grow up to be independent adults. On the other hand, many parents can’t distinguish between true love and spoiled love. The essence of love is to give children freedom, tolerating and appreciating them, while the essence of spoiled love is overprotection and control. In fact, parents shouldn’t try to help their children remove almost all obstacles of everyday life. Instead, they should give their children a chance to take risks and make mistakes. Frequently talking to their children and encouraging them to try what they can do will help them become independent and confident adults. Overprotection has a negative effect on children. Parents should keep in mind that no matter how much they are reluctant, they must let go of their children because their children’s future is dependent on their own efforts.

解析     首段首先对题目中所给的短文发表了自己的观点,随后指出题目中所描述现象的危害,即父母的过度保护会剥夺孩子们探索世界的机会。
    第二段先从两个方面具体分析了父母过度保护孩子的影响和产生这种做法的原因,然后就父母应该如何做提出建议。文中使用了on the one hand、on the other hand和in fact等衔接词,使得行文富有逻辑性,观点更有说服力。
    第三段进行总结,重申观点,并呼应开头。
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