You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star

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问题 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.

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答案This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner’s comment: This answer addresses all parts of the task, though the disadvantages of fame are covered more fully than the advantages. Main ideas are relevant, though the answer would be better if they were developed further. The conclusions drawn are at times repetitive. The organisation of ideas is coherent and some are linked effectively, but the openings of paragraphs 2, 3, 4 and 5 show some limitations. Paragraphs 2 and 3 do not develop a central topic well. Vocabulary is adequate for the task, although inappropriacies indicate that the range is restricted. However, the errors which occur in word choice and spelling do not prevent meaning being communicated. Simple and complex sentence forms are used, and although a number of inaccuracies are noticeable in structure and punctuation, communication is rarely affected. [*]

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