Independent Writing Directions For this task, you will write an essay in response to a question that asks you to state, expl

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问题             Independent Writing Directions
    For this task, you will write an essay in response to a question that asks you to state, explain, and support your opinion on an issue. You will have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay.
    Typically, an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words. Your essay will be judged on the quality of your writing. This includes the development of your ideas, the organization of your essay, and the quality and accuracy of the language you use to express your ideas.
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    Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
    Question:
    What is your opinion?
    In today’s information age, some students prefer to study at home with the help of computers or televisions, while other students like to study at traditional schools. Which of the ways would you prefer?
    Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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答案At the mercy of the ever-accelerated advancement of Internet technology, great changes have occurred in the field of education. Modern devices and techniques are employed in teaching at all levels and the quality of teaching has been amazingly improved. Some optimistic people even claim that owing to the epoch making development of Internet technology, students need not go to conventional schools to receive a formal education, and they only need to stay at home studying in front of their computer instead. At first thought, this proposal seems quite attractive to me for the convenience and efficiency brought by the so called tele-education; however, my second thought tells me otherwise. We cannot deny the merits of tele-education, but it would be a fatal mistake if we lost sight of its disadvantages along with them to be addressed below. In the first instance, the traditional school is a place where young people get training of their mind and character to have self-control, motivation, and habits of discipline. They study in an atmosphere of vibrant pursuit of knowledge. Through the organized activities, they learn to cooperate with other students. As students seek their educational goals, they learn to care for others and get assistance from others. However, learning at home through tele-education will only result in a number of psychological problems vexing the children. Because of the lack of adequate interaction with others, they tend to feel isolated, depressed and self-centered, and they can hardly develop a correct sense of cooperation and competition, which is of vital importance to their future life. Where will our young people learn social skills if they are stuck all day studying behind a computer? Considering that a large number of teenagers already use chat rooms instead of going out and talking to real people, we may be on the verge of creating a generation of social misfits. In the second place, without proper supervision and guidance, online study will just create a greater problem than that which already exists, with students cheating assignments, and academics pocketing vast sums to pass students who are not up to standard. How can we guarantee that the children are listening to the teachers’ lectures while we are away working? What if they are busy playing computer games or having intimate conversations with their dates in the chat room? They are encouraged to lead an insolent life due to the lax discipline. Tele-education, like anything else in the world, has more than one face. While they are essential to modern education, their bright sides shall never keep us from following its demerits. From the above reasons, I strongly hold that the versatile functions of conventional school education will never be replaced by any other forms, including tele-education. They can only serve as supplements to the mainstream conventional school education, for face-to-face contact shall never be neglected.

解析     文章首段中,作者首先指出科技的发展对教育方式及质量等的影响,然后引出摒弃传统教学方式的观点,进而针对这一观点,提出自己的反驳论点——人们不能拒绝现代科技带给教育的好处,但也必须看到其劣势的一面——即全文的中心论点。所以第一段起到了统领全文的作用。在正文中,每一段的第一句,作为分论点的中心句,表明了作者的具体观点,陈述传统教育的优势以及电子教育、在线教育的缺陷,并呼应了全文的中心论点。文章的最后一段,作者重申了坚持传统教育、重视现代教育的观点。所以,这篇范文总体来说论点明确,论据充分,结构合理。
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